Dear Friends,
First off, I have a correction to the April 5 poem-a-day: It turns out
that the current year is 2010, not 2261, and therefore Kozan Ichikyo's
1360 verse has not been remembered "over 900 years later" — at least not
yet. My apologies for the error; I switched monks on you at the last
minute and failed to update that figure!
Now, today's poem: comes to us from Faiz Ahmed Faiz, a prominent figure
in Punjabi literature and politics and a best-selling modern Urdu poet
in both India and Pakistan. This translation is by Naomi Lazard, who
collaborated with Faiz to refine her translations of his selected works
until his death in 1984.
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Be Near Me
Be near me now,
My tormenter, my love, be near me—
At this hour when night comes down,
When, having drunk from the gash of sunset, darkness comes
With the balm of musk in its hands, its diamond lancets,
When it comes with cries of lamentation,
with laughter with songs;
Its blue-gray anklets of pain clinking with every step.
At this hour when hearts, deep in their hiding places,
Have begun to hope once more, when they start their vigil
For hands still enfolded in sleeves;
When wine being poured makes the sound
of inconsolable children
who, though you try with all your heart,
cannot be soothed.
When whatever you want to do cannot be done,
When nothing is of any use;
—At this hour when night comes down,
When night comes, dragging its long face,
dressed in mourning,
Be with me,
My tormenter, my love, be near me.
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Okay, now I'm going to do two things to you:
1) I'm going to switch translators on you. I tend to prefer Naomi
Lazard's translations of Faiz's works. However, partly as an excerise in
experiencing just how much of a different feel two translators can give
you for a poem, I'm also including a more recent translation by the
Kashmiri-American poet Agha Shahid Ali below.
2) I'm going to tell you something about the address "my love."
Addressing a poem to "my love" or "the Belovéd" (depending on your
translation) is a staple of Urdu poetic tradition, and often carries
meanings of lover or dear friend and of God. In addition to those
meanings, Agha Shahid Ali makes a compelling argument that Faiz also
intends to invoke a political meaning of "the Movement" or Marxist
revolution for "the Belovéd." Ali writes, "The reader begins to infer,
through a highly sensuous language, that waiting for the revolution can
be as agonizing and intoxicating as waiting for one's lover."
So here we go with translation number two:
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Be Near Me
You who demolish me, you whom I love,
be near me. Remain near me when evening,
drunk on the blood of the skies,
becomes night, in its one hand
a perfumed balm, in the other
a sword sheathed in the diamond of stars.
Be near me when night laments or sings,
or when it begins to dance,
its steel-blue anklets ringing with grief.
Be here when longings, long submerged
in the heart's waters, resurface
and everyone begins to look:
Where is the assassin? In whose sleeve
is hidden the redeeming knife?
And when wine, as it is poured, is the sobbing
of children whom nothing will console—
when nothing holds,
when nothing is:
at that dark hour when night mourns,
be near me, my destroyer, my lover,
be near me.
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So which translation do you prefer? Do you think which version you read
first impacts that feeling? Can anyone speak to how each translation
compares to the original (below)?
Does the poem read differently to you once the thought is planted that
"the Belovéd" could mean "the movement" or "the revolution"? Did you
infer, or do you think you could have inferred, that meaning in the
translation or in the original without it having been suggested?
If you're not quite quenched, see Faiz's "Before You Came" for one more glass of wine and "When Autumn Came" to let one bird sing.
Best,
Ellen
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